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The morning sun
beams through the front windshield
like an intruder:
brash and unwelcome, forcing you to wake.

Whiskey eyed, smelling like an ashtray,
parked at the back end
of some ghetto ass neighborhood
wondering what the hell you did the night before.

It's like trying to remember words
you haven’t written yet.

One thing is for certain:
a little bit of rope goes a long way,
but a lot of rope
will hang you.
...
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Given 2013-08-16
Shockingly vivid and truthfully vulgar, One of those Nights by ~Jaybird101 tells a story and delivers a powerful punch in so few words. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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MyBlueBalloons Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
oh wow.
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014
Yeah, guess I've had a few of these nights. Glad you enjoyed it :)
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WinstonHarmony Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wonderful. I remember those mornings all too well
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
Thanks, bro. Yeah I suppose its the nights we don't remember so well.
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! I'm Jasmine, a staff blogger from :iconpoeticalcondition:. Just to let you know I've featured your piece in this journal: poeticalcondition.deviantart.c…
It's a round-up of all of our members who have received a DLD or DD over the past 9 days, so please do check it out!
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
Thank you :)
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:iconmadameshadowenn:
madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem at all!
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:iconlaeneris:
Laeneris Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Student Writer
Like trying to remember words you haven’t written yet.

Ah, yes. I think this is a brilliant summary of that kind of feeling. :D
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
Well thank you :)
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:iconlaeneris:
Laeneris Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Student Writer
:aww:
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LynziatheHedgehog Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
dealt with like right now of nazo notice mam again of her room?
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LynziatheHedgehog Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
alezia alexiz the hedghog her in the future
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:iconcrossing-ariel:
crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Great job.  :) Congrats on the DD!
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
Thank you.
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:icontheycallmeloud:
TheyCallMeLoud Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
I have no words for this. Just, some of those words strike a heavy chord with me.
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013
Well thank you :)
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:iconlordrook:
lordrook Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
DEEP!!!!
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013
Thanks
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greeneyedgodessOR21 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is exactly how I felt this morning and regreting the one thing I did do was text the wrong person in my drunken state.... Not a good thing at all.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013
No I imagine not, but everybody has done that at one point or another. So how did it turnout...
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Love it, but one thing: I believe "along way" should be "a long way," correct? ;) 
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013

Yes, ma’am you are absolutely right. Thank you so much for the help. Glad you enjoyed it  :)

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:icontheemptychest:
TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
You're very welcome. Glad to be of service. Congrats on the DD, and keep writing. :D
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD, Jay! :squee:
It's well-deserved.
:tighthug:
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Thank you, Liz :)
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:icongdeyke:
GDeyke Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013   Writer
Like trying to remember words you haven’t written yet - I love that line.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013

Oh yeah, one of my favorites. Thank you for pointing it out :)

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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Congratulations on getting a DD, having your work noticed more widely. :)
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013

Well thank you, Lance. I really appreciate that :)

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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
My pleasure, Jay. :)
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blackcat19964 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student Writer
Scary *_* but good
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Thanks :)
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:iconblackcat19964:
blackcat19964 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Student Writer
*hides*
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ShonaliKapoor Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconcongratsddplz:
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Thank you :)
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation :huggle:
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Thanks, I appreciate that :)
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome :hug:
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Congrats on the recognition, Jay!! Nice work...:)
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Well thank you, Jess :)
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
You're welcome. :)
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Thank you for the congrats. You have a nice day as well :)
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure, thank you :happybounce:
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That last line gave me shivers. Congrats on the well-deserved DD. :heart:
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Thank you :)
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Congratulations Jay. This is a good one.
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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Ye Gads! A DD!

Congratulations. :sun:

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:iconjaybird101:
Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013
Thank you so much :)
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