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Here, with my hands in the dirt.
I never imagined myself
as much of a gardener.

Then again,
I never imagined I'd be much of a cook either,

let alone a poet.

knuckles so broken,
I can barely hold a pencil.
Every time I take a breath,
I feel the ribs that have not yet healed.

Though they should've,
long ago.

So I guess I've changed.
So much so
there are times when I don't recognize myself
in the mirror.

I think,
who is this person standing before me?
Where did he come from?
When did he get here?

But I have no answers.

I guess this is the nature of things.
Though part of me longs to reach out.

To tell the `me that was,
there is a better way.

But there is no `me that was anymore,
only the `me
that is.
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really liked this, it kind of made me think of Fight Club
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
Fight club…that’s interesting. Glad you enjoyed the piece and thank you for taking the time to read it.
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I recently read the book so it has been on my mind and the lines:

"knuckles so broken,
I can barely hold a pencil.
Every time I take a breath,
I feel the ribs that have not yet healed."

Paired with the identity question and not knowing who you really are, really brought Fight Club to my mind.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
Yeah ok I get that, pretty cool actually :)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the voice in this poem. It's kind of world-weary and comforting.
nice work :)
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
World-weary is a very good word for it -wish I had thought of that :). I'm glad you enjoyed this one and I thank ya kindly for the comment :)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
you're welcome!
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bslisted Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012
As John said below, this piece is very straight forward but it is very easy to identify with which is where it finds its true power. A well written piece which makes the shoes to be filled feel like a one size fits all...(if that makes any sense)
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012
Thank you, friend. Seems to be one of those pieces everyone can related to, glad you enjoyed it :)
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Student Writer
This poem is universal. It is cliche in a completely respectful sense of the word. There is no brain teasing metaphor or sensory appealing imagery. It's simply the inner monologue of one man who could easily represent everyone on earth who is unhappy with or confused about or doubtful of the person they are today and the choices they have made. This poem speaks with the collected voices of anyone who is doesn't know themselves anymore and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for writing this.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012
Of course and thank you for the kind words. I know the piece is relatable to many, but had no idea the impact it would have when I wrote it. I’m most certainly glad you enjoyed this one, thanks again.
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I liked this, it reminded me very much of Seamus Heaney's Digging, which is a compliment; I'm a big fan of Heaney's work. :) I love the line: 'So I guess I've changed.' I'm not entirely sure why, but I think it speaks to a lot of people.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012
Well thank you for the compliment, though I must admit I've never read any of Heaney's work. Still if you're a fan that's good enough for me. I appriciate you taking the time to read and comment on this one :)
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :)
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PoetsHand Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012
This is where I am right now! Well done.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012
Yep, crazy isen't it ;) Thank ya though :)
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AElfrics-Cat Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very much enjoyed this. Though I think the... wistfulness? Does that fit?... is underscored with a bit of a shadow in places that gives it the perfect amount of depth. Very lovely. I was listening to Cat Stevens' 'Peace Train' while reading this, and it all just seemed to flow together perfectly. x
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
Oh well thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate the details as well, thank you for that :)
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i-too-am-karamazov Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012
There is a colloquial quality in the voice of the first stanza and the sixth that makes me want to trust it.

The mirror scene, however, drifts dangerously near cliche.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
Well thank you, I appreciate hearing both the good and the bad. I also appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yep... make use of that which is before you. :)
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012
We certainly try :)
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely amazing. I'm only 20, I've got so much of my life left to live, but this strikes a deep chord with me, as I'm sure it does with all those who have gone through change.

That is to say, everybody.

Wonderful poem, in its delivery, formatting, message, and tone. Absolutely breathtaking.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012
Well thank you. This is a very nice comment and I really appreciate it. I’m glad you enjoy this piece :)
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :heart:
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Sherjaxon Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Change the only constant there is. Your poetry is real--which is a great thing.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012
Well I'm glad you think so and I appreciate that. Thank you so much for taking the time to read :)
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2012
It is what it is. What could of been, should have been, might have been...is...nothing.
Because, to risk sounding like a dorkus and repeating myself, it is what it is. :D
And.
You have a lot of things that are very worthwhile about you and in your life, gardener poet cook..pencil holder.
Have fun this weekend.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012
Well thank you, Jess. Nice having you back. Hope you weekend was a good one.
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012
I'm here right now and that counts for something. :)
My weekend was fine and boring. Sounds like it was interesting down at MIS though. :D
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012
MIS?
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012
[link] some local shenanigans going on down in Brooklyn. My brother lives down there and tells me stories. :D
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
<i<Then again,
I never imagined I'd be much of a cook either,

let alone a poet.

knuckles so broken,
I can barely hold a pencil.
Every time I take a breath,
I feel the ribs that have not yet healed.</i>

Lovely. :hug:
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012
Well thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it :) I really dig that part as well, all except for the way it feels anyway ;)
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Formatting fail!

Then again,
I never imagined I'd be much of a cook either,

let alone a poet.

knuckles so broken,
I can barely hold a pencil.
Every time I take a breath,
I feel the ribs that have not yet healed.


:giggle:
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
I'd love to talk to the me that was too. If only!
Wonderful job. :)
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
As would I ;). On another note I seem to recall you having an ID; what’s up with that :)
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012
ya know how it is.... stalkers.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012
Oh yeah, prying eyes.
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012
;)
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riparii Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Looks like you've really hooked those of us of a certain age. :)
Very familiar, very accessible.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
I suppose so, though I imagine the youngsters should probably listen as well ;)
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riparii Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Oh they should but it's axiomatic that they won't. :shrug:
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Now that’s a very wise response,
not your first rodeo is it…
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riparii Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Well d'uh.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
lol... got it :D
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
I never look in the mirror/I'm uncomfortable with strangers/The me I was/just doesn't know/that man who's looking back at me.
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Jaybird101 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
I guess we all suffer from that, glad you can relate :)
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012
-nod-
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
I agree with Ron. Nicely done. :thumbsup:
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